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hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 11:19 pm
by Ray


ten! fourteen! hut! hut!

grunting men chase bouncing balls

a witless distraction



Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Thu Jul 17, 2008 4:46 am
by blackdog4444
The last line had 6 syllables not 5. But still, very good!

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Fri Aug 22, 2008 3:35 pm
by Ray
blackdog4444 wrote:The last line had 6 syllables not 5. But still, very good!
Thanks! I'm just an amateur. :)

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 7:18 am
by blackdog4444
Don't worry! I suck at writing... period. lol :D

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 2:35 am
by Indurrago
Cool, I feel inspired alittle to make my own but I forgot the format. It's 5, 7, 5, for syllables in each line right?

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 4:01 pm
by Ray
Yep, I checked wikipedia --you're right --5 - 7 - 5. It's an interesting challenge to express the essense of something in so few lines --or is it writer's block? :)

I know III had a hard time.

good luck

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Wed Nov 12, 2008 9:12 pm
by blackdog4444
Only if I could write [or type] as good as Ray... :(

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 12:06 pm
by Ray
: P

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 2:11 pm
by blackdog4444
Ahhh, you!! :x lol just kidding. :D
Ray, you got mad skills!!!

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 4:14 pm
by Ray
ha ha ha ha --if YOU say so, then I guess it must be so. :)

BTW, where'd you get that cool avatar?

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 4:40 pm
by blackdog4444
I got the avatar off Photobucket. Why, do you want one?

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 4:10 pm
by Ray
nahh.. thanks though.

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 6:30 pm
by blackdog4444
Your welcome :) Always glad to help you.

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 11:03 pm
by Indurrago
I made this in five minutes lol! :lol: Hope you enjoy it.

For the ball they run
For your money made they sweat
The sad cycle of sports

Re: hey! I made a haiku!

Posted: Sun Dec 07, 2008 1:09 am
by abitagirl
My turn! My turn!


Your team won the game
You yell, "We won! We did it!"
You didn't do squat