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abitagirl wrote:My turn! My turn!


Your team won the game
You yell, "We won! We did it!"
You didn't do squat
Haha, simple but straightforward. Nice job, this is the first time I actually enjoyed writing poetry. :D
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I envy you 3... :evil: lol
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Indurrago wrote:I made this in five minutes lol! :lol: Hope you enjoy it.

For the ball they run
For your money made they sweat
The sad cycle of sports
ahhhh.. very nice Indurrago-san! You have captured the essense of futility. I must now meditate on this profound truth..
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abitagirl wrote:My turn! My turn!


Your team won the game
You yell, "We won! We did it!"
You didn't do squat
oh, you nailed it! You are a warrior poet who has merged with perception!
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I don't know if I'd exactly call myself a poet. :P Well, I could do haikus, I think, so maybe.
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blackdog4444 wrote:I envy you 3... :evil: lol
It really wasn't that hard, the only hard thing was making sure I got the syllables right. C'mon give it a try. :D
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Indurrago wrote:I made this in five minutes lol! :lol: Hope you enjoy it.

For the ball they run
For your money made they sweat
The sad cycle of sports
ahhhh.. very nice Indurrago-san! You have captured the essense of futility. I must now meditate on this profound truth..
Bows* You're welcome Ray-san. I'd like to say it in Japanese but my Japanese is super rusty. I'm thinking of going back to take classes again.
"We believe in Vader, the Darth almighty, destroyer of Alderaan and the Sith. We believe in Luke, his only son, our Jedi. He was concieved by the power of the Force, and born of the senator Padme. Suffered under Darth Sidius, electrocuted, survived and partied with Ewoks. He descended to the Death Star, on the third hour he flew out in an Imperial ship and landed on Endor. He is seated on the right hand of Obi-Wan's ghost. He will come again to train Leia to be a Jedi. We believe? in Yoda.........:D
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Uh... I can't do it! Too hard! [How in the world did I write that 6 page story back in 5th grade?!]
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blackdog4444 wrote:Uh... I can't do it! Too hard! [How in the world did I write that 6 page story back in 5th grade?!]
it is kind of hard, isn't it? it feels sort of unnatural to fit words into three short lines.
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Yea, it's especially hard for me knowing that I truely suck at creative writing. :|
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blackdog4444 wrote:Yea, it's especially hard for me knowing that I truely suck at creative writing. :|
I"m horrible at poetry and my English teacher who did the curriculum back then disliked it too. I think you're just thinking too hard, I mean you're drawings were great. In the end you write something simple but because it's so short it can be looked at different perspectives(people) to have a more deeper meaning than you intended. I think a good writer isn't necessary a good poet(but I'm neither of those). Here's another one:

The fans roared loudly
The team lost quite shamelessly
And I"m still laughing! :D

Ok someone else try now!
"We believe in Vader, the Darth almighty, destroyer of Alderaan and the Sith. We believe in Luke, his only son, our Jedi. He was concieved by the power of the Force, and born of the senator Padme. Suffered under Darth Sidius, electrocuted, survived and partied with Ewoks. He descended to the Death Star, on the third hour he flew out in an Imperial ship and landed on Endor. He is seated on the right hand of Obi-Wan's ghost. He will come again to train Leia to be a Jedi. We believe? in Yoda.........:D
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I think everyone ran out of ideas. :?
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blackdog4444 wrote:I think everyone ran out of ideas. :?
Okay this is my LAST ONE. It's not that good but oh well.

The goal hit, game won
The fools cheer and celebrate
Nothing accomplished

That's enough poetry for this for me. :D
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Indurrago wrote:
blackdog4444 wrote:I think everyone ran out of ideas. :?
Okay this is my LAST ONE. It's not that good but oh well.

The goal hit, game won
The fools cheer and celebrate
Nothing accomplished

That's enough poetry for this for me. :D

It's good enough for me! :mrgreen:
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I STILL can't come up with ideas! How the hell did I get in the 99th percentile on the Iowa Test of Basic Skills in Literature?!?! :?:
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I've got writer's block!
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